Show Not Tell

“Tag you're in” my friend shouted, we were having so much fun that we were oblivious to the fact that the sky was getting dimmer and the clouds swelling up getting ready to weep. We were getting cold and wanted to go back to the house, but we were too late, Suddenly it started pouring down with bucket loads of water. I was getting soaked and by the time we got into the house, my feet were numb.